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She felt it every time. The rush. The adrenaline.

The thrill.

It was an accidental discovery. She hadn't meant to... it just sort of worked itself out. There she was, cramped up on the tube with everyone else, when Jane noticed the neck of the girl in front of her. It was beautiful. Such clean, soft skin, lightly peppered with hairs, snaking down to the secrets held underneath her pinkish collar.

No-one was looking. And they were all packed in so close together. So she just gave it a little lick.

Just a light brush with the tongue. A dab. She barely even made contact - just the faintest of pecks.

And it was beautiful.

The lady barely even knew it had happened. She looked around, absently rubbed the back of her neck, but continued flicking over her iPad as if nothing had happened.

That was when Jane realised that people didn't expect the unexpected, and as such they didn't react to it. The rush she'd felt.. that fleeting intimacy, that slightly salty taste just tingling on her tongue. She thought about it for days. Nights.

And so, inevitably, she did it again. This time it was a gentleman, dozing in the seat opposite her. He'd been basically unconcious for the last two minutes, and Jane spent the whole torturous time staring at his neck. It was brown, brown like milk chocolate, and ever so lightly stubbled.

When the train stopped and she was left alone with him on the carriage, she didn't waste a second. She switched seats, leaned in, and raked her tongue greedily across his skin.

He woke up with a start.

Jane was prepared, though. She stared intently at a newspaper on her lap, trying desperately not to wonder if she was blushing, or how hot it was on that empty train, or ohmygodthatwasamazing.

The man left at the next stop without saying a word. He hadn't given the slightest sign that he knew what Jane had done - to her, that made it even more exciting. Such suspense...

It became Jane's private little game. Whenever she could, she'd sidle up to strangers on the train, hold her breath, wait for the perfect moment and then -

- then she tasted the thrill.
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This is NOT, in any way, autobiographical.

Produced in twenty minutes for WritersInk's Write Off. Lightly edited for typos
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:iconshyanne-kai:
This sure is a strange piece! It's unique and works well, at least she's found something to do on the tube!

'...or how hot it was on that empty train, or ohmygodthatwasamazing' - I like this line, it get's into Jane's head and turns her strange rush into something potentially appealing to the reader.
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~monstroooo Aug 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! This one's proven quite a hit, which scares me a little :paranoid:

No-one else has picked out that line, but I liked it, too :) Always appreciate the feedback :love:
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:iconshyanne-kai:
Haha, maybe it says something about your watchers :XD:
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~monstroooo Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:paranoid:
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~kaleidofish Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eurghhh. I squirmed while reading this, haha. It was nasty, yet hilarious. Great job!
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~monstroooo Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D Appreciate the fav, too!
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:iconfoodpsycho:
This is a really fun piece! I really enjoyed it: sneaky, exciting, with an air of strangeness... all mixed into one delightful cocktail. Paced perfectly. :D
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~monstroooo Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Cheers! :ahoy:
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^neurotype Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh man I would shit a brick if this happened to me...if I even noticed :ohnoes:

Whimsical. Nice.
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~monstroooo Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks!
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